It Takes All Kinds, or How to Write a Menage a Quartre Book Without Losing Your Mind
by Cassandra Carr
Currently Iโm writing book 2 of my Buffalo Intimidators series for Siren Bookstrand. Itโs called Cold As Ice, and follows a hockey teamโs top line as they jointly pursue and then fall in love with a massage therapist. Book 1, Head Games, comes out on November 2nd as an e-book and then goes to print in March 2012, and I want to get this book finished and turned in so it comes out in February 2012. Thereโs a method to my madness, though what it is, nobody knows!
Anyhoo, if youโre not familiar with hockey, you should know that a forward line consists of three guys, which means my story is a mรฉnage a quartre. Yep. You read that right. Iโll give you a moment to find a nice misting fanโฆ
Moving on: I have three heroes in this book, and itโs one of the most challenging things Iโve ever done. So how am I handling three guys (I wish I was handling them!)? Iโm making their personalities as distinct and separate as possible, for one thing. Luc is obviously the leader. Heโs the center of the line and the captain of the team. Jake is the peacemaker, the one who keeps everybody calm and happy. Carter is the relaxed, laid-back one. I wanted their personalities to mesh and complement each other but not be so similar it would be difficult to tell the difference between them.
I also gave each guy a different pet name to call the heroine. Luc calls her baby, Jake calls her honey, and Carter calls her chicka, which is pronounced cheek-a, by the way. Each has a sexual act they prefer over all others. And she reacts to each man in a special way.
But you know what the biggest secret is to not losing my mind? Using a lot of names. Sometimes it seems strange to constantly use the characterโs name rather than a pronoun, but hey, itโs the only way to really keep all this manflesh straight!
Do you have any tips for how you keep the heroes in a mรฉnage story straight as a reader? Letโs hear them!
Hereโs an excerpt of the entire first chapter of Head Games, coming November 2nd from Siren Bookstrand. Please note the story hasnโt been through final editing yet and so there may be typos or other mistakes.
HEAD GAMES EXCERPT:ย
โI canโt take it anymore!โ Leo Laporte, goaltender for the Buffalo Intimidators, glared at his teammates as they glided past him after the third goal in the first ten minutes of the game was scored. โYou guys either play some fucking defense or Iโll jam my stick where the sun donโt shine! You got that?โ Crouching down into his stance, he banged said stick on each post just as he did before every faceoff at center ice. Looking up, he saw the head coach, Tom, waving at him. A quick glance to Tomโs left showed his goaltending partner, Scott Schaffer, warming up. โFuck!โ
Tom called a time-out, and Leo skated to the bench, bracing for the tirade. โYou guys need to get your heads outta your asses, pronto. Youโre down by three already and the gameโs hardly even ten minutes old. Since you donโt seem to want to play for Leo tonight, weโll see how you do with Scott in net.โ Tom threw a sympathetic look Scottโs way. โGood luck saving anything with these jackasses in front of you.โ Tom wasnโt known for mincing words, and tonight was no exception.
Leo opened the door to the bench and squeezed around one of the teamโs hulking defensemen as best he could.
Glaring at the man, he thought, Slugโs not good for much tonight. Certainly not getting out of my way.
The guy was built like a tank and made a much better door than he did a window, as Leo could attest on that third goal. The puck had been in the net before Leo had even been able to react.
Leo clapped Scott on the shoulder. โGood luck, man.โ
Scott nodded and took the ice. Performing a few quick stretches in the crease, he raised his catching glove to signal his readiness to continue play. Leo sat down, taking a long pull from a water bottle heโd grabbed from the shelf in front of him. No one said a word to him, which was just fine.
The team responded to Scott being in net and scored two goals by the end of the first. Leo stalked into the dressing room, heading straight for the can. Just as heโd planned, by the time he got out the second period was about to start. Tom told him he was going to continue to play Scott to see if they couldnโt salvage the game, and Leo nodded. It irked him that heโd been left out to dry, but he also knew damn well theyโd done the same to Scott in the past. It was one of those weird hockey things no one could put a finger on, and Leo didnโt even try.
After trundling back to the bench for the second period, his stomach growled. The noise caused his mind to wander, straight to the tall, curvy woman with a mess of curls his hands just itched to plunge into. Right now Kelly Chase was probably pulling her famous apple pie out of the oven at the bistro where he and Scott had been going for dinner after games for nearly a year. Thinking about seeing her made his cock harden inside his jock and he willed it down. Having a hard-on when wearing a cup was a pretty damn unpleasant experienceโone he wasnโt eager to go through at the moment.
Heโd bet she knew heโd been pulled, but heโd also put money on the fact that if anyone made an ass-hatted comment about why sheโd shut them right up. Kelly knew her hockey, and she watched every game on the big screen TV housed behind the counter at her bistro as best she could in between cooking meals for the customers. He could almost smell her special sour cream apple pie. She only made it on home game days when she knew Leo and Scott would be coming in afterward for their post-game meal. Sheโd even named it after the team, calling it Intimidating Apple Pie. There was sure as hell nothing intimidating about it, but it was definitely sinful, which was just how he liked it.
Thinking about her and her pie brought his mind to other subjects, like what she was most likely wearing that night. It drove him crazy the way she dressedin these cute little light pink T-shirts with Kellyโs emblazoned on the front right across her ample breasts. Even her chefโs clogsโalso light pinkโwere cute. But her body wasnโt cute. It was sexy as hell. She was all bumps and curves, in all the right places. She wasnโt a dainty little thing, standing only about an inch shorter than his five foot ten, and he loved that about herโgave him something to hold on to should he ever be blessed with the opportunity to get into her checkered chefโs pants.
Leo was jerked out of his lust-hazed stupor by the โheads upโ shout from his teammates. A puck was sailing right for him, and he automatically knocked it down with his blocker before it could do any damage. He didnโt wear his goalie mask on the bench, and if his reflexes werenโt lightning-quick he wouldโve taken a puck right to his grill.
Head in the game, Leo.
Settling back, he watched his team tie it up by the end of the second. During intermission, Tom took both he and Scott aside and said he wanted to put Leo back in. Scott shrugged.Heโd always been the more easy-going of the two men. Their combined personalities meshed well, which translated into a successful goaltending partnership and a friendship that had spanned nearly eight years.
Leo stretched out and took the ice for the third. Their opponent seemed momentarily surprised by another goaltending change but recovered quickly and gave the Intimidators a challenge. In the end, Leo got the win by one goal. After accepting the congratulations of his teammates, he bopped Scott on the head as they left the ice together. โKellyโs is on you tonight, bro,โ Scott said.
Leo snorted. Heโd been expecting no less. โNot a problem. I hope she made apple pie.โ
โShe always makes apple pie if thereโs a home game.โ
They rushed through their post-game interviews and hopped into the shower. Only a half hour after the buzzer they were climbing into Leoโs Range Rover on their way to Kellyโs. When they walked in, she turned from behind the counter to greet them. Leo caught sight of her luscious tits straining the material of her T-shirt and his dick twitched. He quickly ran his hand over it.
Down, boy.
โHey guys. Good game, both of you.โ
โThanks,โ they answered in unison, sliding onto stools.
โHow about some apple pie?โ Leo said, licking his lips already. An image of him nibbling pieces of it off of her flew into his head. Man, was he horny tonightโฆ
Kelly put her hands on her hips. โYou know better than that. I never let you have apple pie until after you eat a good meal.โ
Leo rolled his eyes. โFine.โ Perusing the specials written on a chalkboard underneath the TV, he ordered shepherdโs pie. Scott asked for a chicken souvlaki wrap, and they settled back to relax as Kelly went into the kitchen to make their food. โI fuckinโ love those T-shirts. Iโd give up a mil of my salary just to be that T-shirt for a day.โ
โDonโt I know itโฆโ Since it was late, Kelly was waiting tables herself in addition to cooking, and both of them tracked her as she bustled around behind the counter. Coming back over, she poured them both ice waters and plopped silverware in front of them before going into the back once again. There were still a few customers, but everyone gave the Intimidators their privacy hereโit was one of the reasons Leo and Scott loved to come here so much. The primary reason, of course, was Kelly herself.
โOkay, so letโs go over everything again โ make sure weโre on the same page here,โ Leo urged.
โAll right. Canโt hurt. We need to present a united front if weโre gonna do this.โ
โExactly. So both of us want her.โ Theyโd been attracted to Kelly since the moment theyโd laid eyes on her, but had come to the realization a few months ago that their feelings ran deeper than simple lust.
Scott nodded; his eyes as determined and focused as Leo had ever seen them. โYes, we both want her, and the only way that will work is if we share her. But we need to make it clear at some point, maybe not right up front, that we want her more than just sex.โ
โAnd we think tonight is the night?โ
โSheโs definitely intrigued.โ Scott paused and Leo could practically see the wheels turning in his friendโs head. โEven when we mentioned a threesome last week she didnโt run.โ
โYeah, and did you see the expression on her face? She wants it.โ
โI think so, too. But donโt forget. We canโt push her too hard. And everything one of us does affects the other. We canโt let her tear us apart and if this thing starts to do that we need to reconsider.โ
โAgreed,โ Leo answered. He held up his fist. โEven now, even with Kelly, bros over hos, man.โ The two men did a quick fist bump and Leo relaxed a little.
A few minutes later Kelly backed out of the kitchen, her arms laden with plates, and both men paused to admire her ass in her tight chefโs pants. She caught them staring and just shook her head, laughing.
Yes, they were done waiting for her to come around. It was time to put Operation Seduction into action.
CASSANDRA CARR BIO:
Cassandra Carr lives in Western New York with her husband, Inspiration, and her daughter, Too Cute for Words. When not writing she enjoys watching hockey and hanging out on Twitter. Her debut novel, Talk to Me, was released by Loose Id on March 22, 2011. Head Games, Buffalo Intimidators book 1, will release on November 2, 2011 from Siren Bookstrand, and Caught will release December 13, 2011 from Loose Id.
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I actually think that actually saying the heroes’ names are the best way to keep them straight. As a reader, it’s so much easier when the heroine is thinking of their name instead of having to remember who is where and doing what. Having each of them build unique relationships with each other helps as well, but I keep going back to the names. When I’m reading a menage scene, I don’t want to have to stop and go back to figure out what’s going on. I don’t know if any of this helps. Also, I love hockey players! I’m so excited for this book!
I can normally separate them by their different personalities. If they are similar then it’s by their descriptions.
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I agree that actually using the names is very important. Saying “he” or “his” does not help to keep them separate. I think too having them be built/look different helps to picture them better and keep everyone straight.
I will associate their names and physical attributes with the way they act (in what they say and do) toward the heroine. I will admit though, that I will go back and read (at the beginning) several times just to make sure I know who is whom. This reinforces to me who they are.
For me, the names obviously, but the special link they have with the heroine, whether its a hobby or pet names, they each have their own thing that makes them unique. One way that always gets me is when the heroine will say she can distinguish them by scent, again just something memorable to tell them apart ๐
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For me it’s easy. Well…sorta. I try to match the description of the character with an actor and that pretty much sums up how I do it LOL! I also like the name cues you mentioned!